Friday, April 18, 2008

Stay (poem # 4)

Stay right here with me
Stay because i want us to see us
Stay because we were happy
Stay for me to get on the bus

Stay because we were well together
Stay because we were like milk and cereal

1 comment:

G. Latman said...

You have used alliteration and simile successfully, but the requested rhyme scheme is missing.

You have an abab rhyme in stanza one, but you needed two stanzas of abcb, a poem where only the second and fourth lines rhyme in each stanza.